Oooh, this took a while to get to.
So much free time with COVID, and I seem to waste most of it or spend it fussing over pernickety things that don't matter much.
Part of it has been a lack of confidence.
I reached this part where the lead character had been building up to take revenge on someone who destroyed his life. Only, that someone was king of a city state. Military strategy has never been my strongest point, and how to bring down the city kind of stumped me. There are no historical records to help.
Sometimes, when I'm stuck for a way forward, I'll just walk around the room, recording anything that comes out of my head, and usually I end up talking my way out of a corner. But this was just a bit too technical. My brain froze whenever I thought about it, so I stopped writing completely.
I mean, the period was complex. There were a whole load of city states, all run by different lugal and ensi, and all at war over trade routes and resources. Makes for fascinating history, but trying to pick that apart takes time.
And, because it's a revenge scene, it needs to be good. It has to be thought through. You can't just leap in there all d'Artagnan and swish your sword about. Revenge is a dish best served calculated, and I've always been mathematically challenged.
You're not just in charge of an army, you're in charge of everybody's armies.
Daunting.
So, I got nowhere fast. I'd been spewing out words whilst writing a love story, and I'm usually well up for a bit of confrontation, but an entire war... I don't think I've ever written that before. Nope, fairly certain I haven't. The closest I've probably come was the Anglo-Ashanti war in Secure the Shadow, but that was easy to write because it was entirely taken from records of the time. I just added a bit of detail. I've alluded to wars in The Children of Lir and Rosy Hours, but always as a side story, never the main meal. So, overcooking that food analogy, I felt like I'd bitten off more than I could chew.
Because of my inability to figure it out, the manuscript hovered around 58k for an eternity. I was so disheartened, because it had been going so well until that point. But the problem was, I was trying to plot it. I'd sit there with a pen and paper and try to draw up a battle plan.
Completely forgot - I'm a total pantser. I never really plan things out. What I needed to do was start writing and trust that it would resolve itself. I just had to get over that horrible habit of avoidance.
So, yesterday I managed an acceptable 3,730 words. I've just now finished up that chapter that was causing me so much angst. I think it's worked out okay. Now I can get on with the rest of it. Hoping to hit around 65k this afternoon.
Feeling much better about things. The rest of the story is fairly clear from hereon in. Now that it's unavoidably going to be two novels, I'm no longer worried about the word count. Although, I'm slightly worried about this first book as it was never meant to be the main event. I think it's going well, but you never know until the end.
Anyway, to give you a taste of what I've been dealing with, here's a couple of rough-not-ready excerpts.
The rise of Akkad, the political edition:
“Oh,
Apsu,” she said, placing her hand against his cheek. “A storm is rising in the south.
A storm as we have never seen before. There is a man there called Lugalzagesi.
His father, Ukush, was the military commander of Umma. When he died, his son
took control of the city. He ruled as ensi for seven years, but now he
has turned his attention to Lagash–”
“That
is nothing to be afraid of,” Apsu interrupted, placing his hand over hers.
“Umma and Lagash have been fighting over borders since before we were born. One
has the land, the other the wealth. They will settle again soon enough.”
“No,
they will not. Lugalzagesi has taken Lagash.”
Apsu
stared into her eyes as the enormity of her words sank in. Umma was a large city
on the plains to the south, and Lagash was an agricultural settlement by the
banks of the Tigris. Lagash was an important trading post, a gateway to Susa,
and, from there, safe passage through the Zagros Mountains to a hundred
destinations beyond. All his life, Umma had been attempting to encroach on
Lagash, to take over the fertile plain of Gu’edina and provide more food for
their people. But Lagash had a strong army, and so they leased this land to
Umma. Farmers would move onto the plain and grow crops, but then refuse to pay
rent once those crops were harvested. Each time, Lagash reclaimed the land by
force, pushing back the border until it returned to where it had once been. In
retribution, and to pay for the men needed to retake the land, Lagash increased
the price of goods to Umma and taxed them double to access the Susa pass. Umma
would eventually refuse to pay these inflated rates and try to negotiate
another deal to lease land. It was a continuous cycle. Most people living
outside those two cities simply rolled their eyes and paid little attention.
The thought that Umma had overpowered the superior might of Lagash, and lain
claim to it, was disturbing.
“The
rulers of Lagash should take their complaint to the Temple at Nippur,” Apsu
said. “If the gods of these cities are warring, their father, Enlil, will
resolve it. It is one thing for Ningirsu and Shara to squabble as siblings, but
one cannot murder the other.”
“It
is worse than that,” Masarru replied. “Now they are calling him lugal.
They have given him the title of king. On his way to take Lagash, he took Uruk
and Ur also. He commands the entirety of the south, from the Euphrates to the
Tigris, and now they say he is looking north.”
“You
cannot mean Kish?”
“He
has installed ensi in each of the cities he has taken, to administer in
his name. He has already written to Puzur-Suen, offering a deal. If Puzur-Suen
agrees to rule in Lugalzagesi’s name, he says he may keep his throne. Puzur-Suen
refused, but everyone knows he is in poor health. Ur-Zababa has replied without
his father’s knowledge. He said that if Lugalzagesi will sheath his blade until
his father’s peaceful passing, he will kiss Lugalzagesi’s feet and swear fealty
to him.”
“Ur-Zababa
will give up his right to rule as King of Kish, and become subordinate to this southern
sarraqum? I doubt it.”
“He
has no choice. This Lugalzagesi is like the great flood rolling in. He drowns
everything in his path. There is no way to turn him back or to calm his
tempest. If my husband does not agree to rule on Lugalzagesi’s terms, he will
not rule at all. My husband is arrogant, he’s cruel, but he is not stupid.”
Sippar
was the last true Sumerian city. Beyond it lay a wide plain of sun-bleached
grass. Somewhere in that desolation stood the austere bastion of Akkad, a solemn
sentinel, guarding the boundary of order and chaos. The remnants of a past
glory, her people scattered throughout the world. Once you passed the northern
gates of Akkad, lawlessness reigned. Two mighty kingdoms, Ebla and Mari, raged like
brawling bulls. It was said to be a fight to the death.
Ebla
had once been a great seat of learning, where scribes and scholars gathered as
ants to an open pot of honey. Even Nur-ili, the oneiromancer of Kish, had once trained
there. The kingdom crested the shores of the upper sea. Boats sailed from her
harbour as large as whales. They left port for months on end and returned with fragrant
oils, spices, fabrics and wine. Villages along the coast harvested pearls as
fat as figs, placing them before the alters of strange gods, unheard of in any
other land.
In
order to get these goods to the affluent markets of Sumer, they had to sail
them down the Euphrates. The problem was that Mari controlled the northern
Euphrates. Having been chased out of Sumer by Queen Kubaba generations ago, the
Mariotes struck north and secured the river all the way from the tar pits of
Hit to the throne of bountiful Dagan at Tuttul. They controlled the trade route
with a cut-throat army, hardened by centuries of war with Sumer and its city
states. Without the cooperation of Mari, Ebla could not get her lucrative wears
to market, and Mari would rather steal than barter. Many other kingdoms had
been drawn into the argument over the years, including Nagar and Elam,
providing soldiers and weapons in much the same way a fat man feeds kindling to
the fire so that he can continue to eat.